tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4959513252058182415.post7049977558960283855..comments2023-03-30T16:54:12.401-07:00Comments on Author Sarah Laurenson: SCBWI-L.A.’s Working Writer’s Retreat AftermathSarah Laurensonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4959513252058182415.post-34682562117826084852009-09-24T16:11:48.871-07:002009-09-24T16:11:48.871-07:00This sounds good, Sarah. Genuine, excellent, profe...This sounds good, Sarah. Genuine, excellent, professional feedback that you can take, mull over, and decide how to use. And I'm still reeling over Arthur Levine. Wow. I'm impressed!Robin B.https://www.blogger.com/profile/11471528485010071521noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4959513252058182415.post-4607502524773969502009-09-21T10:35:10.494-07:002009-09-21T10:35:10.494-07:00Hi Sarah,
I have meant to send you a note of appre...Hi Sarah,<br />I have meant to send you a note of appreciation for so long. The work you offer to SCBWI is invaluable. I know that there are many besides me who see your regular posts and feel so grateful for your generous contributions. This last, opening the door to a ctritique By Arthur A. Levine, is very brave! And generous doesn't cover it. Just for the record, I'm often drawn to books that start off leaving the reader disoriented for a time. However, that's probably a very risky approach. You were so fortunate to have that critique. Im happy for you and look forward to seeing your book in print.<br />Thanks again!<br />Gilliangillianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15301294908033313954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4959513252058182415.post-41105563050530905712009-09-20T18:49:11.699-07:002009-09-20T18:49:11.699-07:00Had time to read this now, and want to thank you a...Had time to read this now, and want to thank you again for posting a round up!<br />Sounds like you got solid advice you can work with, but also that you have a very strong foundation!!! Don't forget, this editor is at the top of the industry, so these are the standards he's measuring your story by!!!! You should feel very happy and proud!!!!<br />You go, girl!!!! WOOOHOOO!!!<br />:-)Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4959513252058182415.post-24953602156866425932009-09-19T13:33:28.341-07:002009-09-19T13:33:28.341-07:00Wow, that was really insightful and makes me want ...Wow, that was really insightful and makes me want to run and check my manuscript over with new eyes! This is especially great because we <i>have</i> sampled the bit of <i>Garlic</i> you shared, so thank you again for that, too!! :D<br /><br />Thank you, Sarah! :DRitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03823648489427679440noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4959513252058182415.post-53881184175014785802009-09-19T13:18:23.654-07:002009-09-19T13:18:23.654-07:00Thanks for posting this!!!! I'm doing a blog ...Thanks for posting this!!!! I'm doing a blog drive by, but want to come back again and read.<br /><br />Can't wait!!<br />:-)Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006129353079344noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4959513252058182415.post-29753774561163326792009-09-19T12:30:46.292-07:002009-09-19T12:30:46.292-07:00Always wondered what happened at these critiques, ...Always wondered what happened at these critiques, and you've given me a glimpse. Many thanks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4959513252058182415.post-37254101668499759712009-09-18T18:14:05.749-07:002009-09-18T18:14:05.749-07:00Thank you for posting your critiques. It's al...Thank you for posting your critiques. It's always interesting and helpful to read about what catches a reader's attention.Stephanie Denise Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02545038440488426989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4959513252058182415.post-24847491763105133282009-09-18T15:21:10.267-07:002009-09-18T15:21:10.267-07:00Thanks for sharing, Sarah. It's brave enough t...Thanks for sharing, Sarah. It's brave enough to read your stuff to the editors, let alone posting it online! :-)Greg Pincushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00449684160718426340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4959513252058182415.post-37173116826569151202009-09-18T15:19:56.711-07:002009-09-18T15:19:56.711-07:00Cool, Sarah!
And the zit popping is vile, disgust...Cool, Sarah!<br /><br />And the zit popping is vile, disgusting, repulsive, and stayed with me for two days after I read that sample.<br /><br />It's perfect.<br /><br />It's a genius little detail that humanizes the MC and definitely makes him MG relateable. (is that a word? Just woke up from a nap with a squirmy, sick 5 year old.)<br /><br />I haven't read anything from the other but the snippets I've read by you have always left me wanting more. If I read the part of <i>Garlic</i> that you sampled while I was browsing in the bookstore, I would buy it. And I am sort of your target market...I love the MGs and really enjoy the ones that seem to resonate.<br /><br />So, there you have it. My opinion. That and four bucks will get you a cup of coffee at Starbuck's.Laurelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06120847492230531939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4959513252058182415.post-21861824433916085942009-09-18T13:27:17.808-07:002009-09-18T13:27:17.808-07:00Hi Heather,
They really are there to help us beco...Hi Heather,<br /><br />They really are there to help us become better writers. Helps them when the quality level in their submissions improves. Helps us get our foot in the door in more places.<br /><br />I've had critiques that I didn't agree with, but the words stayed in the back of my mind. One of them was on Garlic and the transition from chapter one to chapter two. At the time, I didn't understand what she was talking about when she wrote that it was "jarring" being at home in chapter one and at school in two, but now I do understand what she was trying to say (I think).Sarah Laurensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09252565450452195395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4959513252058182415.post-17668371674654697792009-09-18T13:05:53.298-07:002009-09-18T13:05:53.298-07:00Sarah-- thank you very much for sharing this with ...Sarah-- thank you very much for sharing this with us. You've gone above and beyond. This gives me a glimpse into the one-on-one critique world, and squelches some of my fear surrounding the process.Heather Kellyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06699360166269376285noreply@blogger.com